I love the changes you've made, to the dialogue and the story structure. The disjointed feeling here complements the original's sort of sudden, jarring cuts. And I love how you've done the italics scenes. But yes, I really like the dialogue changes - Urahara would "hear" himself differently, perhaps, and Rukia would "sound" different to him.
I honestly wasn't expecting this fic to get remixed, as I wrote it for bleach_flashfic, but wow am I impressed with the results.
Absolutely wonderful (I'm all eeeeeee right now) and thank you so very much for writing this! ♥
[eta] JAINA. YES. I KNEW IT. I KNEW IT WAS YOU. :D :D
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I love the changes you've made, to the dialogue and the story structure. The disjointed feeling here complements the original's sort of sudden, jarring cuts. And I love how you've done the italics scenes. But yes, I really like the dialogue changes - Urahara would "hear" himself differently, perhaps, and Rukia would "sound" different to him.
I honestly wasn't expecting this fic to get remixed, as I wrote it for
Absolutely wonderful (I'm all eeeeeee right now) and thank you so very much for writing this! ♥
[eta] JAINA. YES. I KNEW IT. I KNEW IT WAS YOU. :D :D